December 20, 20205 yr The harmonies you use seem at times a little indistinct or maybe like they're voiced too richly with too much doubling of the 3rd in any given chord (which in the classical period was something to avoid). You also use a lot of parallelisms which isn't bad in itself but your approach to this piece seems mostly chordal rather than melodic although there are a few nice inversions and where the cello and violin seem to lead nicely melodically. (0:46 is a nice violin line, and around 1:12 is a nice cello line) Sometimes, because of your thick voicings and doublings, the passing notes sound especially dissonant. Also, the final chord doesn't seem to be allowed to speak to give the piece a sense of finality. Thanks for sharing!
December 25, 20205 yr Look, I can't give it anything more than "nice" simply because I don't feel that there's any material my ear can attach to. It actually seems like you scattered some chords one after the other which... could be a nice exercise in voice leading? I also feel that the piece could have been cut at any other place, agree with @PaperComposer, the end doesn't feel... finite. I believe some clear melody line(s) would make the difference.
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