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Sonata no. 1 in D major


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My first piano sonata guys! Have a good day and please give feedback! :)

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I think the speed problem is more apparent because of the electronic playback.  There's nothing wrong with fast flowing music, but it must be phrased properly (ie slurs and ties etc.,) so that a pianist can smooth over all the bumps and bring out much more of the detail.  In this presentation, it is hard to hear the detail and I didn't notice much in the way of dynamic variation and pedalling, that would have help greatly with the overall feel of the piece.

Having said that, I do like it, it has some really nice moments and as Luis says, it is a mix of styles but I would say it leans more toward the classic, than the modern.

Is the piece finished in your mind, or do you plan to edit still?  I say that because usually I post a piece to see what others think might improve it, and I go back and edit according to the advice that I like and think is appropriate for the piece.

Anyway, good work

Regard

Mark

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Well another viewpoint, is its 'tires me out' because of the speed and the length..   It's not that I haven't heard impossibly fast executed pieces before..  It's not really a 'make or break' thing for me..   If you tried a bit of tempo change and decided on this.. I accept.. It is good.  Along the way I've met a few musicians who can just rip off perfectly executed 32 nd note riffs.  I guess I get a bit jealous cause I can't do it, (but my computer can..)

 

I will occasionally put note clashes in my own compositions, I like them, they resolve fast, and sound interesting to me, and add an 'artifact' or imperfection'  yet others do not like it.. 

each composer writes for his own reasons for techniques or devices he uses,  does he want to be commercial, not care about 'formative rules's etc?. When Michael Jackson wrote Billy Jean, everyone was against the 64 bar intro.. and wanted him to cut it.. He was insistent, it needed that much time to build up momentum..  

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The work is finished, at least the first movement is. I remember I was writing this piece in my head that day reflecting back on my mood. My computer's sound is spoilt so I can't hear the music I make, only once I'm finished and I send it to my other devices for playback. So far this piece has had only one revision. I probably should slow it down, because it seems I have no hope of playing it.

Thanks for the feedback!

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I don't have a problem with the fast tempo. Some spots worth looking at:

1. 0:10 and 0:23: Instead of B3 and C#4 in the left hand, 2 D3s would be preferable. I find the original clashy.

2. The melody could be more flowy when there's lots of gaps in it e.g 0:13 and other repetitions of this figure in other keys.

3. The F#4 at 0:11 and 0:24 does not fit with the rest of the piece.

4. The rests between sections are too long.

5. 0:45-0:48 has some awkward harmonies.

6. The second theme (0:48-1:5) could be more lyrical and slower-moving in the melody.

7. 1:19: F#4 does not fit here

8. The scale passage in the right hand at 1:28 should end on A6 rather than A5. The ear expects it to end on that note. You will need to modify the coda of the xposition if you make this change.

9. The beginning of the development could be more melodic and flowy.

10. G-naturals in F-sharp minor are inappropriate, at least in the context of this section.

12. I like the way you varied the repetition of the first theme after the development. The comments I made about the exposition apply at the recapitulation.

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