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Very nice melody!!!

Wowww! @Muhammadreza After the 2':30" Very nice melody! All this piece is cool, but this piano piece is -for me- amazing! 

A melody that -i dont know why- but continues playing over my head even if i am in silence,  without music & headphones!

At the start, it is a little bit sad -but dark is sad as well, so it is exactlly what the tittle of this music says!

Well written (my opinion)  i like it because it rest me what i am listening !  After the 2':30"as i said... very very nice melody!

-----Thats my minimal opinion for your work! ----  :)

i am hearing it right now! :)

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The beginning's repetition worked for itself, but you could have potentially added more to the growing effect, rather than just the velocity.
The middle section was a bit confusing since the backing chords were harder to hear and it sounded like the third of the chord dominating the whole thing which can sound a little awkward.
The end section's melody doesn't really compliment the harmonic rhythm, in my opinion. It jumps around a lot and not necessarily together all the time. Ending on the i every time might have contributed a bit.
I like the sonorities you're going for, it just seems a little safe right now.

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On 4/24/2018 at 1:28 AM, Ampnoe's said:

 After the 2':30" Very nice melody! All this piece is cool, but this piano piece is -for me- amazing!  

Oh, Thanks. Actually, it was a synth melody for another track. But I found when I decrease the tempo, and change chords, it would work on this track, too. So, I just moved it on this one and wrote another melody for that one.

On 4/24/2018 at 1:28 AM, Ampnoe's said:

At the start, it is a little bit sad -but dark is sad as well, so it is exactlly what the tittle of this music says!

I think this is because I love Black Metal music, and I could bring my desired atmospheres from Black Metal to Post-Rock.

On 4/24/2018 at 10:26 PM, Monarcheon said:

The middle section was a bit confusing since the backing chords were harder to hear and it sounded like the third of the chord dominating the whole thing which can sound a little awkward.

Backing guitar (eBow) is playing a G, and bass plays D. Notes on lead guitar are D E F C. I think this is why it sounded not that good.

On 4/24/2018 at 10:26 PM, Monarcheon said:

The end section's melody doesn't really compliment the harmonic rhythm, in my opinion. It jumps around a lot and not necessarily together all the time. Ending on the i every time might have contributed a bit.

I even didn't write that riff, I just improvised it over the drum loop, and I think this is why it's not matching the rhythm.

On 4/24/2018 at 10:26 PM, Monarcheon said:

I like the sonorities you're going for, it just seems a little safe right now.

Thanks \m/

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*Sad with the good and poetic meaning, sad musics many times means a lot :) i like this style! Keep up your good work :)

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