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This tune is Mario-inspired. I thought of a 3D platform game more than a 2D platform game when I wrote this, because 3D platform games' music is less "monotonous" and more "all out" than 2D platform games (A good comparison is Super Mario 3D Land's music to New Super Mario Bros. music).

I ALWAYS appreciate constructive criticism (even if it's picky). My biggest concern is the melody of the second part (which starts from F Major), because I'm not even sure if that part's melody is singing in a "happy, joyful way". It sounds a bit too over the top for a tune like this, but I tried to find a melody that contrasts the first melody, and I didn't want to make it sound too similar to it either.

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The loop transition seems to sound a little stiff, so I would appreciate hearing thoughts about that part too.

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It definitely sounds like Mario! I don't find the transitions "stiff" or whatever, but I'm not really a fan of the counter melody you have around 30 seconds. That's my only complaint really.

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@Arthur1124

It's-a me! Someone that will listen-a and review your piece-a! (sounds like pizza)

9 out of 10 from me.

The only problem I have is that "wak wak wak" in the background.

I guess it makes sense in the mario games context,

for they do things like that a lot,

but for me it was a bit annoying,

and could get more annoying hearing it as a loop.

I'd cut out some of it.

Other than that... great job-a!

Definitely a mario- jumping around happily smashing stuff.

 

 

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As a fan of Mario music, I find this track amazing. Great vibe. Nice slides in the melodies.

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 I don't find the transitions "stiff" or whatever, but I'm not really a fan of the counter melody you have around 30 seconds. That's my only complaint really.

Is it because the countermelody takes over the volume of the main melody?

 

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Okay, now that I listen to it again, yes, I do agree that the "wak wak" is a bit overdone and irritating when listened over and over.

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This is great. I love the groove, and the bass line is really funky. I definitely agree with the other comments that the wak wak is too overboard.

But I really do like the variety in the rhythm section, which makes it very reminiscent of nintendo-y music. You did a fine job.

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15 hours ago, JBegley said:

But I really do like the variety in the rhythm section, which makes it very reminiscent of nintendo-y music.

 

Thanks. Could you please define the "variety" of the rhythm section you're talking about in this topic?

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3 hours ago, Arthur1124 said:

Thanks. Could you please define the "variety" of the rhythm section you're talking about in this topic?

 

Oh. I meant the syncopation gave the percussion more variety than if it were just a straight beat. I should have said ''syncopation.'' I guess ''variety'' was the wrong word to describe what I was thinking. haha.

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On 7/8/2018 at 6:58 PM, AngelCityOutlaw said:

I don't find the transitions "stiff" or whatever, but I'm not really a fan of the counter melody you have around 30 seconds. That's my only complaint really.

 

Is it because the countermelody takes over the volume of the main melody?

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OMG IT SOUNDS LIKE MARIO JESUS, but I looooove how happy and carefree it sounds!!! but yeah the wak wak its too much but  I would not remove all of it.. i would just put it there on the rhythm just a liiiitle bit .. just like 4 wak waks between 2-4 bars.. use it on the crucial parts.. just to give it a nice ambient kinda silly tone

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On 9/11/2018 at 12:29 PM, Artistirreal said:

OMG IT SOUNDS LIKE MARIO JESUS, but I looooove how happy and carefree it sounds!!! but yeah the wak wak its too much but  I would not remove all of it.. i would just put it there on the rhythm just a liiiitle bit .. just like 4 wak waks between 2-4 bars.. use it on the crucial parts.. just to give it a nice ambient kinda silly tone

 

Thanks.

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