I'm not used to this style but I stylistically I can't find any glaring flaws here.
On a practical level,
1. Are you sure this piece is playable, and at this tempo? I'm not that skilled so you'll have to judge it for yourself, but those semiquavers thirds can easily tense up my finger muscles, and the repeated octaves..., and repeated thumb notes? like bar 178, and Mr. big hands like bar 169
2. voicing issues like bar 13, the crotchets don't mean anything if the next quaver you are just going to bang fortissimo anyway