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Hi all,

I received some interesting feedback on my Melody for piano ''Winter''. One of the comments was by @Gustav Johnson. He encouraged me to compose a suite based on the seasons (Dutch: Seizoenen). The Suite is called Piano Suite ''Seizoenen.''
The Winter is the first movement and can be found here: http://www.youngcomposers.com/t34743/melody-for-piano-winter/#play.The Lente (Spring) is the second movement.

I tried to imitate typical Spring elements, such as whistling birds and animals that wake up from hibernation.

Feedback would be very nice!

Kind regards,

Maarten

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Note-wise it's quite pleasant. Only thing that really bothered me was m. 40 with the B vs. C.
You'll have to forgive me... why is called "Lente" when the marking says otherwise.
I also think the rondo form is a little too strained, especially the last A repetition... maybe there could be a little more in the second A and third A sections.
Overall, it's pretty nice to listen too.

 

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22 hours ago, Monarcheon said:

Note-wise it's quite pleasant. Only thing that really bothered me was m. 40 with the B vs. C.
You'll have to forgive me... why is called "Lente" when the marking says otherwise.
I also think the rondo form is a little too strained, especially the last A repetition... maybe there could be a little more in the second A and third A sections.
Overall, it's pretty nice to listen too.

Hi Monarcheon,

I am glad you enjoyed the piece!

I have changed the clashing B to an A.
''Lente'' means Spring in Dutch. ''Seizoenen'' means Seasons. So the second movement is called ''Lente'' and the whole piece is called ''Seizoenen,'' if that is what you don't understand.
I see what you are trying to say. I will develop the A theme more, so that there is more variation.

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This music genre is not my strong but I liked very much what I heard. The only not so good thing I have to say is that I can't relate to spring, probably it's just me, but I had to say it. I imagine spring as something more linear and filled with sound, and this music is very "broken" with a lot of stacatto, but its a matter of subjectivity.

I really liked a lot, It reminds me of Shostakovich! Good work!

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1 hour ago, Martim Manuel said:

This music genre is not my strong but I liked very much what I heard. The only not so good thing I have to say is that I can't relate to spring, probably it's just me, but I had to say it. I imagine spring as something more linear and filled with sound, and this music is very "broken" with a lot of stacatto, but its a matter of subjectivity.

I really liked a lot, It reminds me of Shostakovich! Good work!

 

I am glad you like the music!

Of course you can say that the music does not sound like Spring for you. I think every person has his own associations and feelings with music. Music is very personal.
This piece is about my Spring associations and feelings. Some people can easily recognise the Spring and some don't.

Comparing Maestro Shostakovich's work with this composition is a great compliment to me. Thank you!

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Hey, awesome!

Listening time... :)

Besides the clashing notes mentioned and that you have fixed, it's a nice motive. The rondo structure doesn't really bother me, BUT you have a choice here...

1) keep the structure as is and choose strategic places to develop the motives

or

2) develop the structure and leave the motives unchanged

Keeping that in mind as you write will help to strengthen the weak sections, almost like constructing a floor or a wall--find the weak places and think strategically about how you can strengthen them.

I just listened to Winter and Lente one after the other and it feels nice, so both sections compliment each other to my ears. That's definitely cool.

Keep working on the details, this is good work!

Gustav Johnson

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